[apps-discuss] Apps-team review of draft-arkko-townsley-coexistence-04
S Moonesamy <sm+ietf@elandsys.com> Wed, 29 September 2010 00:05 UTC
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Subject: [apps-discuss] Apps-team review of draft-arkko-townsley-coexistence-04
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Hello, I have been selected as the Applications Area Review Team reviewer for this draft (for background on apps-review, please see http://www.apps.ietf.org/content/applications-area-review-team). Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-arkko-townsley-coexistence-04 Reviewer: S. Moonesamy Review Date: September 28, 2010 IETF Last Call Date: September 13, 2010 IESG Telechat Date: Unknown Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a RFC but has a few issues that should be fixed before publication. Please refer to the comment about the intended status. The Introduction Section does not reflect the text in the Abstract Section which mentions that the document is being published to reflect the thinking at the time (2008). Major Issues: None Minor Issues: According to the Abstract Section: "This document was originally created as input to the Montreal co- existence interim meeting in October 2008, which led to the rechartering of the Behave and Softwire working groups to take on new IPv4 and IPv6 coexistence work. This document is published as a historical record of the thinking at the time." The Introduction Section should be updated to reflect what the document seeks to represent, i.e. the thinking in 2008. In the Security Considerations Section: "It is important to note that some of the solutions may have impacts on how IPsec or DNS Security can work through translation devices." I suggest adding application protocols to that as the solutions may have an impact on them. Nits: The intended status of this I-D is Informational. The Abstract Section mentions that: "This document is published as a historical record of the thinking at the time." In Section 2.1, please expand "GW" on first use. In Section 2.1.2, please expand "ALGs" on first use. Regards, S. Moonesamy