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Subject: [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review of draft-ietf-kitten-gssapi-naming-exts-14
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Document:             draft-ietf-kitten-gssapi-naming-exts-14
Title:                GSS-API Naming Extensions
Reviewer:             William J. Mills
Review Date:          April 17, 2012
IETF Last Call Date:  N/A
IESG Telechat Date:   N/A


Summary: This draft is nearly ready for publication, some corrections are suggested.


Major Issues: 


Section 5, 9th paragraph:  The first sentence is not declarative enough, "Local implementations or platforms are likely to have sufficient policy and information to know when contexts can be treated as the same.", I'd prefer changing "Are likely" to "MUST", and then add "and MUST NOT assume different attributes are equivalent" at the end of that sentence.  


Minor Issues: 

Section 7.6, last paragraph: strike "; this has been discussed on the KITTEN WG mailing list and the consensus seems to be that, indeed, that was always the intention".  It's not required to note WG consensus, and this is implicit in document adoption.

Generally:  I wonder at the choice of not including ABNF for things like attribute name, since you're defining a syntax here.  It's well enough defined in the text, but I generally think of parseable syntax as being more explicitly defined with ABNF.

Nits: 


Section 3, 3rd paragraph: "follows.This"needs spaces.

Section 9, 3rd para: "asserte" needs a "d".  "Any additional semantics is always the result of applying policy.", change "is" to "are".

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