[apps-discuss] APPSDIR review of draft-ietf-radext-radius-extensions-08
Yoshiro YONEYA <yoshiro.yoneya@jprs.co.jp> Thu, 17 January 2013 09:10 UTC
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From: Yoshiro YONEYA <yoshiro.yoneya@jprs.co.jp>
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Subject: [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review of draft-ietf-radext-radius-extensions-08
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I have been selected as the Applications Area Directorate reviewer for
this draft (for background on appsdir, please see
http://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/app/trac/wiki/ApplicationsAreaDirectorate).
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd
or AD before posting a new version of the draft.
Document: draft-ietf-radext-radius-extensions-08
Title: Remote Authentication Dial In User Service (RADIUS) Protocol Extensions
Reviewer: Yoshiro Yoneya
Review Date: 2013-01-17
IETF Last Call Date: 2013-01-25
IESG Telechat Date: unknown
Summary:
This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard RFC.
Major Issues:
none
Minor Issues:
none
Nits:
- Section 1.1.1. [Page 6]
One gaol which was not ...
-> One goal which was not ...
- Section 2. [Page 9]
...
so that the definition of the Length field remains unchanged. The
new attribute formats are designed to be compatible with the
...
so that the definition of the Length field remains unchanged.
-> [The same sentences are repeated twice. Remove duplicated one.]
- Section 6.5. [Page 40]
Specifications which allocate many attributes MUST NOT request that
allocation be made from from the standard space.
-> Specifications which allocate many attributes MUST NOT request that
allocation be made from the standard space.
- Section 6.6. [Page 41]
Where a group of TLVs is strictly defined, and not expected to
change, and and totals less than 247 octets of data,
-> Where a group of TLVs is strictly defined, and not expected to
change, and totals less than 247 octets of data,
Regards,
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Yoshiro YONEYA <yoshiro.yoneya@jprs.co.jp>
- [apps-discuss] APPSDIR review of draft-ietf-radex… Yoshiro YONEYA
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