Re: [AVT] RE: I-D ACTION:draft-ietf-avt-hc-over-mpls-protocol-02.txt

[Colin Perkins <csp at csperkins.org>]

Jerry,

On 6 Jan 2006, at 23:46, Ash, Gerald R ((Jerry)) wrote:
> > I still find this draft difficult to read, and in need of a
> > significant rewrite to improve the quality of the prose, and of the
> > explanations.
>
> Please provide any specific suggestions and/or suggested text, that  
> way
> you're more likely to be happy with the result!
>
> > and editing the protocol description for clarity of explanation.
>
> Again, please provide any specific suggestions and/or suggested text.

It is the responsibility of the authors to ensure a draft is  
readable, with good quality prose, not the responsibility of the  
working group chair. If you are unable to copy edit the draft  
yourself, I would suggest you hire a professional technical writer to  
do so.

> > At the very least, I suggest expanding the introductory material on
> > MPLS and header compression, adding complete worked examples of the
> > negotiation process,
>
> I think you're suggesting an example of using the PW Interface  
> Parameter
> Sub-TLV carrying one of the HC setup TLVs given in Section 4.2 of
> http://ietf.org/internet-drafts/draft-ietf-avt-hc-over-mpls- 
> protocol-02.
> txt.  Such an example would emphasize the PW setup and also show  
> how the
> HC scheme setup is performed with PWs.

I'm suggesting there be a complete worked example of the entire  
negotiation process for a HC over MPLS flow, to make it clear exactly  
what messages flow and what they contain.

Colin

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