RE: [AVT] RE: I-D ACTION:draft-ietf-avt-hc-over-mpls-protocol-02.txt

["Ash, Gerald R \(Jerry\)" <gash at att.com>]

Colin,

> >> I still find this draft difficult to read, and in need of a
> >> significant rewrite to improve the quality of the prose, and of the
> >> explanations.

> > Please provide any specific suggestions and/or suggested 
> > text, that way you're more likely to be happy with the result!

> >> and editing the protocol description for clarity of explanation.

> > Again, please provide any specific suggestions and/or suggested
> > text.

> It is the responsibility of the authors to ensure a draft is  
> readable, with good quality prose, not the responsibility of the  
> working group chair.

Of course.  But as a commenter, when you suggest to 'rewrite the
document', it is more helpful to point to specific areas to rewrite, and
most helpful to provide suggested text.  That is often done, especially
by working group chairs in my experience.  That is likely to converge
faster.

> If you are unable to copy edit the draft  
> yourself, I would suggest you hire a professional technical 
> writer to do so.

A bit insulting if you're serious.  I think the authors have
demonstrated the ability to write clearly, thank you.

Jerry

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