Re: [CCAMP] WG Last Call: WSON documents - draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-signal-compatibility-ospf

Authors,
	I have some comments on this document. Many are strictly
editorial. Note that I'm the document shepherd, see RFC 4858 for more
information.

- Please address my general comments on the WSON document set

- In two places
  s/These routing enhancements are required/These routing enhancements
are applicable

- Do you want to reference
draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-general-constraints-ospf-te? Perhaps in the intro.

- Section 2, SUB-TLV ordering
  Looks like this ordering matches rwa-info, even though the encoding
  document doesn't. (Suggest the encoding document be fixed.)

- Section 2 says:

   All sub-TLVs defined here may occur at most once in any given
   Optical Node TLV. "At most once" means that if there is sub-TLV
   related information, it should be always included.

   The second sentence reads to me to be closer to "at least once".
   "At most once" means no more than one time. Please clarify your
   intent.

- Section 2.1: title
  s/Sub-TLV Details/Resource Block Information

- Section 2.1, 1st paragraph
  Looks like this belongs at the end of the section 2 (intro)

- Section 2.1, should be sub-sub-tlv, and there are 4 not 3 or 5

   There are four nested sub-sub-TLVs defined in the Resource Block
   Information sub-TLV.

   Value          Length      sub-Sub-TLV Type

  also add lines for "Input Bit Rate List"

- Sections 2.1.1->2.1.4
  shouldn't these be sections 2.2 -> 2.5?

- Section 2.1.3
  Drop "16 bit"

- Section 3:
  Don't you want to require the use of the RFC6205 defined label format
  for interfaces advertised with  WSON-LSC?

- Section 6:
  Acee's comment on IANA applies here too. (Should look at his other
  comments too and see if they apply to this document.)

That's it on this one,
Lou

On 10/22/2013 4:34 PM, Lou Berger wrote:
> 
> All,
> 	Given the recent draft submission deadline and only one comment being
> received to date, we'd like to extend the WG more time for review.
> 
> These drafts represent significant work by the authors and WG, so please
> review and let the WG know what you think (positive or negative)!
> 
> Please have all comments in by October 29.
> 
> Thank you,
> Lou (and Deborah)
> 
> On 10/1/2013 12:34 PM, Lou Berger wrote:
>> All,
>>
>> This mail begins working group last call on the WSON documents.  As
>> there are 6 documents in this set, the last call will be three weeks.
>> The documents included in the last call are:
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-info-18
>> (Informational, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-general-constraint-encode-11
>> (Standards Track, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-wson-encode-21
>> (Standards Track)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-general-constraints-ospf-te-05
>> (Standards Track, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-signal-compatibility-ospf-12
>> (Standards Track, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-signaling-06 (Standards
>> Track) Also has one open issue that will need to be resolved as part of
>> LC, see http://trac.tools.ietf.org/wg/ccamp/trac/ticket/52.
>>
>> This working group last call ends on October 22.  Comments should be
>> sent to the CCAMP mailing list.  Please remember to include the
>> technical basis for any comments.
>>
>> Positive comments, e.g., "I've reviewed this document and believe it is
>> ready for publication", are welcome!
>>
>> Please note that we're still missing some IPR statements.  Any
>> forthcoming publication request will be delayed by late IPR
>> statements/disclosures.
>>
>>
>> Thank you,
>> Lou (and Deborah)
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