Re: [CCAMP] WG Last Call: WSON documents - draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-general-constraints-ospf-te

Authors,
	I have some comments on this document. Many are strictly
editorial. Note that I'm the document shepherd, see RFC 4858 for more
information.

- Please address my general comments on the WSON document set

- You define a new top-level TLV, the Generic Node Attribute TLV.  Did
you consider using the Node Attribute TLV defined in RFC5786? Why not
use it?

- The Generic Node Attribute TLV is underspecified as is.
  - What is the sub-tlv format
  - how are unknown TLVs handled
  - are there ordering or other processing constraints
  - etc.

- Section 2.1 and 3.1:
  no need to defined the type twice, drop "(the type is TBD by IANA)"

  the TLV isn't defined in GEN-ENCODE, the format of the value field is.
  in both sections:
  s/meaning and format of this sub-TLV/meaning and format of the sub-TLV
value field

- Section 4
  OLD
   The flooding of Opaque LSAs must follow the rules
   specified in [RFC2328], [RFC5250], [RFC3630], [RFC4203].
NEW
   The flooding rules of Opaque LSAs are
   specified in [RFC2328], [RFC5250], [RFC3630], [RFC4203].

- Section 4, last paragraph
  Text should be aligned with the preexisting TE procedures as defined
  in Section 3 of RFC3630.

- Section 7
  Looks like Acee already covered this section.

- References. [RFC6205] is listed but not used.

That's it on this one,
Lou

On 10/22/2013 4:34 PM, Lou Berger wrote:
> 
> All,
> 	Given the recent draft submission deadline and only one comment being
> received to date, we'd like to extend the WG more time for review.
> 
> These drafts represent significant work by the authors and WG, so please
> review and let the WG know what you think (positive or negative)!
> 
> Please have all comments in by October 29.
> 
> Thank you,
> Lou (and Deborah)
> 
> On 10/1/2013 12:34 PM, Lou Berger wrote:
>> All,
>>
>> This mail begins working group last call on the WSON documents.  As
>> there are 6 documents in this set, the last call will be three weeks.
>> The documents included in the last call are:
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-info-18
>> (Informational, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-general-constraint-encode-11
>> (Standards Track, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-rwa-wson-encode-21
>> (Standards Track)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-gmpls-general-constraints-ospf-te-05
>> (Standards Track, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-signal-compatibility-ospf-12
>> (Standards Track, IPR Disclosed)
>>
>> http://tools.ietf.org/html/draft-ietf-ccamp-wson-signaling-06 (Standards
>> Track) Also has one open issue that will need to be resolved as part of
>> LC, see http://trac.tools.ietf.org/wg/ccamp/trac/ticket/52.
>>
>> This working group last call ends on October 22.  Comments should be
>> sent to the CCAMP mailing list.  Please remember to include the
>> technical basis for any comments.
>>
>> Positive comments, e.g., "I've reviewed this document and believe it is
>> ready for publication", are welcome!
>>
>> Please note that we're still missing some IPR statements.  Any
>> forthcoming publication request will be delayed by late IPR
>> statements/disclosures.
>>
>>
>> Thank you,
>> Lou (and Deborah)
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