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Re: [dhcwg] dhc wg last call on "DHCP options for PANA Authentication Agents"

Rearranging option formats except suboption seem clear.

I support this document to be moved forward with minor changes.

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Requirements Language

The key words "MUST", "MUST NOT", "REQUIRED", "SHALL", "SHALL NOT",
"SHOULD", "SHOULD NOT", "RECOMMENDED", "MAY", and "OPTIONAL" in this
document are to be interpreted as described in RFC 2119 [RFC2119].

It's duplicated sentence with Section 3. 
SUGGESTION: Removed

[2] Introduction

This document specifies DHCPv4 [RFC2131] and DHCPv6 [RFC3315] options
that allow PANA client (PaC) to discover PANA Authentication Agents
(PAA).  This is one of the many methods for locating PAN
Authentication Agents: manual configuration is an example of another one.

"manual configuration is an example of another one" is not necessary
phrase in this sentence. DHCP is an option. It implies several methods
are available already in PANA space. So, specific example as *manual*
is not needed to appear in here.
SUGGESTION: Removed

[3] Terminology

It is not clear. In fact, lot of DHC folks don't know about PANA. 
SUGGESTION: Elaborate relevant terms described in this document
in brief especially, PaC, PAA.

[4] DHCP Specification Dependency

This document describes new options for DHCPv4 and DHCPv6 for
obtaining a list of IP addresses to locate a PANA Authentication
Agent.

This document should be read in conjunction with the DHCPv4
specifications [RFC2131], [RFC2132] and DHCPv6 specification
[RFC3315].

Definitions for terms and acronyms not specifically defined in this
document are defined in [RFC2131], [RFC2132] and [RFC3315].
 
Why we need this section ? Seems duplicated sentences. 
SUGGESTION: Removed or elaborate any explicit aspect.

Hope this helps...

Daniel (Soohong Daniel Park)
Mobile Convergence Laboratory, SAMSUNG Electronics.

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