[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-sidr-ghostbusters-13.txt
"Miguel A. Garcia" <Miguel.A.Garcia@ericsson.com> Mon, 19 September 2011 14:05 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-sidr-ghostbusters-13.txt
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I have been selected as the General Area Review Team (Gen-ART) reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-sidr-ghostbusters-13.txt Reviewer: Miguel Garcia <miguel.a.garcia@ericsson.com> Review Date: 2011-09-19 IETF LC End Date: 2011-09-28 IESG Telechat date: Summary: The document is ready for publication as a standards track RFC. Major issues: none Minor issues: none Nits/editorial comments: - The Introduction section (Section 1), should be informative by nature. Therefore, I do not expect to see normative text written in there. So, I suggest to move the 7th paragraph in Section 1 to elsewhere in the document, since it contains the normative word "MAY". - The document contains a normative reference to itself (first normative reference). That is a kind of a loop. It is used in Section 8.3, IANA registration of a new media type. It could be safely replaced by "[This Document]". /Miguel -- Miguel A. Garcia +34-91-339-3608 Ericsson Spain
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