[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-mip4-nemo-haaro-06
"Roni Even" <ron.even.tlv@gmail.com> Sat, 29 October 2011 15:01 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-ietf-mip4-nemo-haaro-06
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-mip4-nemo-haaro-06 Reviewer: Roni Even Review Date: 2011-10-29 IETF LC End Date: 2011-10-31 IESG Telechat date: 2011-11-3 Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as an experimental RFC. Major issues: Minor issues: 1. The IANA section is not clear. It talks about three new tables but it was not clear to me which one they were and what is the extension policy for the tables. 2. Section 4.2 talks about realm compression. Is it always used when using prefix compression or can you just do prefix compression is there is no benefit from using the realm compression since it is a bit complicated. Nits/editorial comments: 1. Section 3.1 first paragraph "alredy" 2. Section 3.3.1 "only be when" change to "only when" and "and and whose" delete one of the "and".