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[Gen-art] Gen-ART Combined Last Call and Telechat Review of draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc1948bis-01

Ben Campbell <ben@nostrum.com> Tue, 01 November 2011 19:55 UTC

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Document: draft-ietf-tcpm-rfc1948bis-01
Reviewer: Ben Campbell
Review Date: 2011-01-01
IETF LC End Date: 2011-01-02
IESG Telechat date: 2011-01-03

Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication as a proposed standard. I have a couple of minor comments and nits that might be worth considering, but probably shouldn't block anything.

Major issues:

None

Minor issues:

-- section 3, paragraph after ISN formula: "It is vital that F not be computable…"

If it's vital for security reasons, it seems like this would be worthy of normative language.

-- Normative reference to RFC1321

This is a normative downref. It's a reasonable downref  (maybe even the canonical reasonable downref). I call it out for the sake of completeness.

-- Appendix B, Removal of "A Common TCP Bug" section:

Can you comment on why the section was removed?


Nits/editorial comments:

-- abstract

The abstract should explicitly mention the update to RFC793

-- section 1, 2nd paragraph:

Please expand ISN on first mention

-- informative references:

Is there any way to avoid orphaning the last reference fragment? It's confusing to find half a reference at the top of the next page.

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