[Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-appsawg-greylisting
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-Art review of draft-ietf-appsawg-greylisting
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at < http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please wait for direction from your document shepherd or AD before posting a new version of the draft. Document: draft-ietf-appsawg-greylisting Reviewer: Kathleen Moriarty Review Date: 23 April IETF LC End Date: IESG Telechat date: (if known) Summary: Ready with nits. This memo describes the art of email greylisting, the practice of providing temporarily degraded service to unknown email clients as an anti-abuse mechanism. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: Introduction: First sentence: The word 'differential' should be 'different' unless you change the sentence structure. It could be that there is a differential between services. Second sentence: Change provider to providing Change from: "In some cases an actor does not have a known reputation; this can justify providing degraded service, until there is a basis for provider better service." To: "In some cases an actor does not have a known reputation; this can justify providing degraded service, until there is a basis for providing better service." Section 2.1: The double dashes should be parentheses instead -- -- replaced by () Section 3, third paragraph, last sentence: add a comma: From: To the greylisting implementation such clients are once again unknown, and they will once again be subjected to the delay. To: To the greylisting Implementation, such clients are once again unknown, and they will once again be subjected to the delay. Section 3, fourth paragraph, second sentence: remove the comma: From: It has to be large enough to keep the necessary history, and fast enough to avoid excessive inefficiencies in the server's operations. To: It has to be large enough to keep the necessary history and fast enough to avoid excessive inefficiencies in the server's operations. Section 3, fifth paragraph, second to last sentence: remove "the," and "such" From: Experience suggests that the, the vast majority of mail comes from places on such a developed exception list, so after a training period, only a small proportion of mail is actually affected. To: Experience suggests that the vast majority of mail comes from places on a developed exception list, so after a training period, only a small proportion of mail is actually affected. Section 4.1: second to last paragraph: remove unnecessary comma: From: Other side effects include out-of-order delivery of related, sequenced messages. To: Other side effects include out-of-order delivery of related sequenced messages. Section 4.2: Second paragraph: The commas can be removed as only two items are joined in the list. When you have three or more, a comma is used.
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