[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-fecframe-ldpc-02
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Mon, 01 October 2012 19:08 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> . Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-fecframe-ldpc-02 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2012-10-01 IETF LC End Date: 2012-10-01 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is almost ready for publication as a standard track RFC, but I have some comments. Nits/editorial comments: [Page 3], Section 1, "ALC [RFC5775]", please spell out ALC: "Asynchronous Layered Coding (ALC)" [Page 3], Section 1, "NORM [RFC5740]", please spell out NORM: "NACK-Oriented Reliable Multicast (NORM)" [Page 4], line 3, ALU is first used, please spell out: "Application Data Unit (ADU)", or move section "3.3 Abbreviations" to the beginning. [Page 4], Section "3.1. Definitions", after the ":" for all definitions, please start with capital letters or with lower case (for consistency please choose one) [Page 5], for "ADU Block", it would clearer to have Flow ID, Length and Padding fields in parenthesis next to F[], L[], and Pad[] respectively. [Page 5], after "FEC Framework Configuration Information" please add "(FFCI)". [Page 5], section 4.1, "G MUST be equal..", please define G in section "3.2. Notations". [Page 9], last sentence, "Each ADUI contributes to exactly one source symbol to the source block.", it is clearer to say "...of the source block." [Page 15], Section 6.1.1, "(e.g., before versus after FEC protection, and within the end-system versus in a middlebox)", please rephrase if possible, this is not very clear. [Page 19], reference [SIMPLE_RS] is now at version 03. [Page 19], reference [RFC5053]: title is missing "for Object Delivery" -Overall for clarity, please adapt one method for spelling out acronyms (either in one section in intro, or throughout the text as they are first used; but not both). -Overall for clarity, some line feed would be useful in section 5. Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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