[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-07

"Black, David" <david.black@emc.com> Tue, 05 February 2013 19:34 UTC

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The -07 version of this draft addresses all of the nits noted in the Gen-ART
review of the -06 version.

This draft is ready for publication as a Proposed Standard RFC.

Thanks,
--David

From: Black, David
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Subject: Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06

I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please
see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-pwe3-mpls-eth-oam-iwk-06
Reviewer: David L. Black
Review Date: August 20, 2012
IETF LC End Date: August 20, 2012

Summary:
This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that
should be fixed before publication.



This draft covers defect behavior for Ethernet pseudowires,

including defect state mapping and PE defect reporting behavior.

The draft is generally in good shape.  I found a few minor nits.



1) The draft uses a lot of acronyms - while each acronym appears to

be expanded on first use, an additional section near the start of the

draft listing all of them would be helpful.



2) There's a typo in the first paragraph of section 2:



     covers the following Ethernet OAM (Opertaions, Administration and



Opertaions -> Operations.



3) The following normative reference is incomplete - please add additional

information that will enable a reader to locate the referenced document:



     [MEF16] "Ethernet Local Management Interface", MEF16, January 2006.



4) idnits 2.12.13 did not like the pagination:



  == The page length should not exceed 58 lines per page, but there was 22
     longer pages, the longest (page 1) being 61 lines

Thanks,
--David
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