Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03
Peter Saint-Andre <psaintan@cisco.com> Wed, 06 March 2013 16:44 UTC
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Subject: Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03
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Hi Meral, thanks for your review. On Mar 6, 2013, at 8:32 AM, Meral Shirazipour wrote: > I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> . > > Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. > > Document: draft-ietf-appsawg-acct-uri-03 > Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour > Review Date: 2013-03-06 > IETF LC End Date: 2013-03-06 > IESG Telechat date: NA > > > Summary: > This draft is ready to be published as Proposed Standard but I have some comments. > > > Nits/editorial comments: > [Page 1] please consider spelling out "URI" in the abstract as in "uniform resource identifier (URI)" Will do. > [Page 3] paragraph 4, "method for deferencing", do you mean "dereferencing" ? Yes, I'll fix that. > [Page 5] Section 5, "..access to personally identifying information..", do you mean "..access to identifiable personal information" ? Looking at draft-iab-privacy-considerations, I think "personal data" might be best. Peter
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Peter Saint-Andre
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Meral Shirazipour
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Barry Leiba
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Peter Saint-Andre
- Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-i… Jari Arkko