[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-burst-gap-discard-13

"Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg@bell-labs.com> Fri, 19 April 2013 15:09 UTC

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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-burst-gap-discard-13
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at
<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-xrblock-rtcp-xr-burst-gap-discard-13
Reviewer: Vijay K. Gurbani
Review Date: Apr-19-2013
IETF LC End Date: Mar-15-2013
IESG Telechat date: Apr-25-2013

This document is ready as a Proposed Standard.  One minor comment and
one nit below.

Major: 0
Minor: 1
Nits: 1

Minor:
- S2.1, the sentence, "A packet that arrives within this time window
  but is too early or late to be played out or thrown away before
  playout due to packet duplication or redundancy shall be regarded as
  discarded." is hard to read and parse.

  Clearly, if a packet arrives early, it will be buffered.  Just as
  clearly, if a packet arrives too late to be played out, it will be
  discarded.  Maybe you should break the offending sentence into two
  separate sentences, one dealing with early arrival and the other
  with late arrival.

Nits
- S1.1, last paragraph: s/in[RFC3611]./in [RFC3611]./

Thanks,

- vijay
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[Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-xrblock-rt… Vijay K. Gurbani
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Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-xrbloc… Jari Arkko
Re: [Gen-art] Gen-ART review of draft-ietf-xrbloc… Qin Wu