[Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-jabley-dnsext-eui48-eui64-rrtypes-05
"Peter Yee" <peter@akayla.com> Mon, 08 July 2013 03:21 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART LC review of draft-jabley-dnsext-eui48-eui64-rrtypes-05
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq> Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-jabley-dnsext-eui48-eui64-rrtypes-05 Reviewer: Peter Yee Review Date: July-07-2013 IETF LC End Date: July-17-2013 IESG Telechat date: August-15-2013 Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication as an Informational RFC, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. [Ready with nits] This draft defines DNS Resources Record Types for encoding IEEE 802 EUI-48 and EUI-64 addresses. Potential privacy issues with this scheme have been soundly beaten to death with extreme prejudice. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits: Page 1, Abstract, 1st paragraph: After "e.g.", append a comma and delete an extraneous space before "Ethernet". Page 3, Introduction, 1st paragraph, 2nd sentence: change "This" to "These" and change "specification defines" to "specifications define". Page 3, Introduction, 2nd paragraph: append a comma after "e.g.". -Peter Yee