[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-repute-query-http-09

Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Thu, 29 August 2013 08:26 UTC

From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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Subject: [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-repute-query-http-09
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq .
Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-repute-query-http-09
Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour
Review Date: 2013-08-29
IETF LC End Date:  2013-08-29
IESG Telechat date: 2013-09-12


Summary:
This draft is almost ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments.


Nits/editorial comments:
Nits:
-[Page 4], line 2, "attributies" --typo-->"attributes"
-[Page 4], line 8, "support support" ----> remove duplicate
-[Page 4], line 5 before last, "is cable of" ----->"is capable of"
-[Page 4], line 4 before last, "until finds" ----->"until it finds"
-[Page 5], Section 3.3, line 2, "[URI-TEMPLATE].  (See Section 3.2.)  ",  misplaced dot after the reference.
-[Page 6], line 2, "An media" --typo-->"A media"

comments:
-Not sure if it was forgotten or by choice: second author's affiliation is missing.
-Suggestion: for references to RFCs, it is better to use the [RFC####] as reference in the text instead of ["name"].
-Section 4, please double check to make sure RFC5226 is followed.
-Appendix B, not sure if necessary since it is the WGs list and not some other mailing list.


Best Regards,
Meral
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Meral Shirazipour
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[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Meral Shirazipour
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