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Christer Holmberg <christer.holmberg@ericsson.com> Mon, 24 February 2014 08:24 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq<https://rvi.se.ericsson.net/owa/,DanaInfo=mail.internal.ericsson.com,SSL+redir.aspx?C=vCr1L8PWQUqCZeSAn6cKI_Abm6K8vNAI1hJJwcnXe8VAikdG2PcMrstLszaJeAo7bR8W3uA2uu0.&URL=https%3a%2f%2frvi.se.ericsson.net%2fowa%2f%2cDanaInfo%3dmail.internal.ericsson.com%2cSSL%2bredir.aspx%3fC%3dvCr1L8PWQUqCZeSAn6cKI_Abm6K8vNAI1hJJwcnXe8VAikdG2PcMrstLszaJeAo7bR8W3uA2uu0.%26URL%3dhttp%253a%252f%252fwiki.tools.ietf.org%252farea%252fgen%252ftrac%252fwiki%252fGenArtfaq>>

Document:                         draft-ietf-roll-trickle-mcast-07

Reviewer:                           Christer Holmberg

Review Date:                     24 February 2014

IETF LC End Date:             7 February 2014

IETF Telechat Date:         N/A

Summary:        I provided comments on a previous version (-05) of this document. Unfortunately I can't find the reply to my comments from the authors, so some of my comments may not have been valid, or the authors may have disagreed with my change suggestions.

However, when I check the -07 version of the document I see that some of my comments have not been addressed, so I'll re-submit them again - just in case.


Major Issues: None

Minor Issues: None

Editorial nits:

Section 1:
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Q_1_1:

I assume "LLN" stands for "Low power and Lossy Networks", but there is no extension anywhere. Please insert "Low power and Lossy Networks (LLN)" on first occurance.


Section 3:
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Q_3_1:

In a few places the text says "this protocol". I would suggest to replace that with "MPL".


Section 4:
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Q_4_2:

I would suggest to add something in front of "Overview" in the subject of section 4.3. Overview of what? :)




Regards,

Christer

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