[Gen-art] Early review of draft-reschke-xml2rfc-08.txt
Tom Taylor <tom.taylor.stds@gmail.com> Thu, 19 June 2014 18:51 UTC
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Subject: [Gen-art] Early review of draft-reschke-xml2rfc-08.txt
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I am one of the assigned Gen-ART reviewers for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at <http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>. Please resolve these comments along with any other comments you may receive. Tom Taylor Summary This draft is basically ready for publication, but has nits that should be fixed before publication. I have identified one very minor issue as shown below. The documentation in general is excellent and clarifies some points I was never clear on with Marshall Rose's guide. As a meta-comment, we need some document like Marshall Rose's guide that shows how everything fits together. One possibility is to put out a document explaining and presenting the general I-D template, and another that explains and presents the MIB template. I'm prepared to author these if others agree on the need and are not interested in doing the work. Major Issues ------------ None. Minor Issues ------------ In the description of the 'year' attribute of <date>, the number of digits is not specified. (Also true of 'day', but doesn't matter unless processors will glitch on encountering leading zeroes.) Nits and Editorial Improvements ------------------------------- Given that this is an early review, I did not run IDnits. I did check all the internal cross-references (I think), and they were all correct. I'd be interested in how that was achieved. I end up flipping back and forth in my documents to find the value of the anchor for the section I want to refer to. s/only text content/text content only/g -- sounds better to the English-speaking ear. 2.5.1 Expand descriptive sentence slightly? "... horizontal alignment of ... on the page." 2.13 s/first case/boilerplate case/ s/second case/case of bibliographic references/ OLD: When "year", "month" or "day" are left out, the processor will attempt to use the current system date if the attributes that are specified do match the system date. NEW: When one or more of "year", "month", or "day" are left out, the processor will attempt to use the current system date if the attributes that are present are consistent with that date. 2.17.1 "... horizontal alignment of ... on the page." 2.36 typo in verb bullet: s/usign/using/ 2.39.1 "... on the page." 3. First line typo: s/can not/cannot/ 4. Last line above page break and XML declaration: s/like that/like this/ 5. Second line: s/it's/its/ 6. Second paragraph, third line: s/role/rule/. Next line: s/US-ACSII/US-ASCII/ 7. Suggest dropping "Furthermore" from beginning of third paragraph because it is redundant with "as well" later in the sentence. 8.1: Applications that use this media type: delete "either". Fragment identifier considerations: s/uses/used/ in middle line. Appendix B. You might note that while v1 is documented in RFC 2629, the version of XML2RFC documented in Marshall Rose's guide "Writing I-Ds and RFCs using XML (revised)" <http://xml.resource.org/authoring/draft-mrose-writing-rfcs.html> is closer to v2 (or is it identical to v2?).
- [Gen-art] Early review of draft-reschke-xml2rfc-0… Tom Taylor
- Re: [Gen-art] Early review of draft-reschke-xml2r… Julian Reschke
- Re: [Gen-art] Early review of draft-reschke-xml2r… Julian Reschke
- Re: [Gen-art] Early review of draft-reschke-xml2r… Tom Taylor