[Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-enum-reference-format-10
Tom Taylor <tom.taylor.stds@gmail.com> Tue, 09 December 2014 18:24 UTC
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
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Document: draft-ietf-mile-enum-reference-format-10
Reviewer: Tom Taylor
Review Date: 9/12/2014
IETF LC End Date: 16/12/2014
IESG Telechat date: (if known)
Summary: Basically a well-written document with tiny nits. The "major
issue" may simply be a matter of my inexperience with XML schemas.
Major issues: I am having a hard time reconciling the extension
procedures specified in Section 5 of RFC 5070 [IODEF] with the content
of the draft. As I see it, you have added an attribute to ReferenceName,
and this is actually not covered by RFC 5070. As I understand it, 5.1
covers ENUMs and 5.2 covers new classes. My conclusion is that this
document should update RFC 5070, describing how to add new attributes --
or is that the equivalent of adding a new class? Even if it were a
simple matter of adding ENUMs, where are the ext- declarations called
for by Section 5.1 of RFC 5070?
Minor issues:
Nits/editorial comments:
Tiny nit, third paragraph of Security Considerations:
s/third-party/third party/ (three times)
Former is an adjective, but contecxt requires a noun.
The last sentence of the IANA Considerations section has a forward
reference to Section 6 which should instead be Section 5.
- [Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-enum-… Tom Taylor
- Re: [Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-e… Black, David
- Re: [Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-e… Tom Taylor
- Re: [Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-e… Adam W. Montville
- Re: [Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-e… Black, David
- Re: [Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-e… Tom Taylor
- Re: [Gen-art] Last Call Review: draft-ietf-mile-e… Jari Arkko