[Gen-art] Second Last Call Review of draft-ietf-precis-framework-22

Tom Taylor <tom.taylor.stds@gmail.com> Sun, 15 February 2015 01:57 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on
Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at

<http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq>.

Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments
you may receive.

Document: draft-ietf-precis-framework-22
Reviewer: Tom Taylor
Review Date: 2015-02-14
IETF LC End Date: 2015-02-19
IESG Telechat date: 2015-02-19

Summary: Ready to go with one nit. Noted that idNits is not happy with 
the reference to RFC 20 because of the latter's unknown state.

Major issues:

Minor issues:

Nits/editorial comments:

Section 1, bullet a: s/included protocol/included in a protocol/