[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-08
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Wed, 29 July 2015 08:25 UTC
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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-homenet-dncp-08 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2015-07-29 IETF LC End Date: 2015-07-29 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC but I have some comments . Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -Abstract, suggestion: "uses Trickle"---->"uses the Trickle algorithm" -Abstract, suggestion: "DNCP is an abstract protocol, that"---->"DNCP is an abstract protocol, and" -[Page 3], Intro, last paragraph the terms "infrequently" and "As the network of nodes, or the rate of data changes grows over a given time interval" it would be good to give example values or ranges to better describe what is meant by these terms. -[Page 3], "specifies transport method"---->"specifies the transport method" -[Page 10], "higher then"---->"higher than" -[Page 28], "Certifcate"---->"Certificate" -Please consider adding caption and title to all figures. Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
- [Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-… Meral Shirazipour
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