[Gen-art] Gen-ART Last Call review of draft-ietf-avtext-rtp-stream-pause-08
Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com> Thu, 13 August 2015 18:31 UTC
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From: Meral Shirazipour <meral.shirazipour@ericsson.com>
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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. For background on Gen-ART, please see the FAQ at http://wiki.tools.ietf.org/area/gen/trac/wiki/GenArtfaq. Please resolve these comments along with any other Last Call comments you may receive. Document: draft-ietf-avtext-rtp-stream-pause-08 Reviewer: Meral Shirazipour Review Date: 2015-08-13 IETF LC End Date: 2015-08-13 IESG Telechat date: NA Summary: This draft is ready to be published as Standards Track RFC; I have some editorial comments. Major issues: Minor issues: Nits/editorial comments: -[Page 4], "which either uses"---->"which either use" -[Page 5], Section 2.1 some of the terms are never used in the draft like 3GPP, BGW, MTU, SGW, TCP, LTE... -[Page 11], "include CSRC in it's stream "---->"include CSRC in its stream" -[Page 18], "with first hand information"---->"with firsthand information" -[Page 21], Figure 4 caption would be clearer to say if it applies to sender e.g. "RTP Pause States in Sender" -[Page 50], "SRTP is the the most"---->"SRTP is the most" Best Regards, Meral --- Meral Shirazipour Ericsson Research www.ericsson.com
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