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[Gen-art] review of draft-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc-12.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Mon, 29 February 2016 14:15 UTC

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I am the assigned Gen-ART reviewer for this draft. The General Area
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Document: draft-ietf-httpbis-alt-svc-12.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20160226
IETF LC End Date: 20160224
IESG Telechat date: 20160303

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC 3 and B page 24: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 6 page 13: my spell checker complains about idempotency because
  it believes the term doesn't exist. Looking in the web it seems
  to be an accepted (and IMHO well understood) new term...
  In conclusion I have no concern if you keep it. Note if you have
  a language expert you can ask if idempotence is better (I am French
  so I am afraid I have a bias in favor of this alternative because
  it is its spelling in French :-).

 - 9.2 page 17: e.g. -> e.g.,

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

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