Re: Last Call: draft-mcwalter-langtag-mib (Language TagMIB)toProposed Standard

["CE Whitehead" <cewcathar at hotmail.com>]

Hi, I have a little question about style in one place in the McWalter draft; 
I suggest you replace "This" in Section 3, paragraph 3; line 2, with 'the 
language tag defined here,' 'the language tag defined by MIB,' or something 
similar:

> > >             In theory, BCP 47 language tags are of unlimited length.
> > >             This language tag is of limited length.

"This" apparently refers back to the "Abstract:"

"Abstract

  "This MIB module defines a textual convention to represent BCP 47
  [RFC4646] language tags."

But I am concerned about style here because:

It's been a while since "a textual convention to represent BCP 47 [RFC4646] 
language tags" was referred to--
and thus it's unclear here what "This" is referring to in section 3.

(when I taught I would not let my students refer to anything outside of the
text unless it was very obvious;
nor would I let them refer to something more than one paragraph back without
specifying it exactly again.)


Again my comment is about style not about content!

Thanks,

C. E. Whitehead
cewcathar at hotmail.com
(ietf-languages at iana.org)

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