[Ltru] draft-ietf-ltru-matching-02

[Frank Ellermann <nobody at xyzzy.claranet.de>]

Hi, if Randy really wants to "last call" the matching draft
together with the registry draft it's time to find some nits:

- the references are still messy (2234 instead of 2234bis,
  normative IANA MoU, unreferenced [2], [3], [4], [6], [7],
  [8], [9], [11], [12], [13], [14], [15], [16], [17], {18],
  [20] ).

- the credits are dubious, IIRC only Doug, Ira, Ned, John,
  and Randy contributed to the matching draft (and Ira isn't
  listed).

- chapter 5 is apparently a copy from the registry draft.
  A simple pointer "security considerations are discussed in
  [draft-ietf-ltru-registry]" is better.

- chapter 6 is apparently a copy from the registry draft, it
  could be deleted.  Probably this kills some more references.

- chapter 4 says "this is the first version of this document".
  But its draft -02, not -00.

- chapter 3 doesn't appear in the order recommended in draft
  rfc-editor-rfc2223bis-08 (Acknowledgements, Security, IANA).
  I've seen Bruce check this, and I got this "wrong" elsewhere.

- The "Abstract" contains references, but that's not allowed.
  The XML input is apparently invalid, for a nice validator
  see also <http://rtg.ietf.org/~fenner/ietf/xml2rfc-valid/>.
  No, I'm not joking, I discussed this on the xml2rfc list.

- For the author's addresses I'd add some corresponding URLs,
  e.g. <http://www.inter-locale.com/> - no idea for Mark, IBM
  URLs are in permanent flux...

  ...one hour later, <http://purl.net/net/cp> and queries like
  <http://purl.net/net/cp/858> work again.  Grmbl.

- The intro defines unused keywords REQUIRED, SHALL, SHALL NOT,
  and OPTIONAL.  Bruce checks this.

- chapter 2.1.1 mentions en-DE-boont, that's an odd example
  for matching.

- chapter 2.1.2 says *[ "-" extlang ]
  Bill's checker proposes *( "-" extlang )
  We want *3( "-" extlang )

  It also says ( "x" / "X" ) instead of "x".  Same problem in
  the registry draft, AFAIK ("x"/"X") should be "x", reported
  several times here.

Obscure ABNF issues => TILT, I don't look any further, bye.



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