Re: [RAI] [UPDATED] Gen-ART review of draft-c1222-transport-over-ip-00.txt

["Avygdor Moise" <avy at fdos.ca>]

Dear Mr. Gurbani,

If I am not mistaken, the -01 document was actually an earlier submission, 
named name "rfcxxx-c1222-obver-IP,txt". It was pointed to me by Ms. Cindy 
Morgan that our first submission  should have been a -00, so we renamed  the 
original submission to "draft-c1222-transort-over-ip-00.txt" and updated the 
content to address initial concerns, such as the use of "NOT" vs. "not" and 
other matters of style.

So if you look at 
http://tools.ietf.org/search/draft-c1222-transport-over-ip-00, which is 
dated August 21, 2009 and you should not find any references to "not", as it 
passes all tests for style.

However, to be on the safe side we shall ensure that the following text is 
entered as written below for Section 3.1.1.3

... "The loss or closure of the connection SHALL NOT automatically result in 
the termination
  of the C12.22 associations between the peer nodes. " ...

I will wait for guidance for submitting the recommended corrections.

Thanks again

Avy
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----- Original Message ----- 
From: "Vijay K. Gurbani" <vkg at alcatel-lucent.com>
To: "Avygdor Moise" <avy at fdos.ca>
Cc: "General Area Review Team" <gen-art at ietf.org>; <rai at ietf.org>; 
<jonathan.brodkin at fdos.ca>
Sent: Thursday, August 27, 2009 8:07 AM
Subject: Re: [UPDATED] Gen-ART review of 
draft-c1222-transport-over-ip-00.txt


> Avygdor Moise wrote:
> > Dear Mr. Gurbani,
> >  Thank you for the very clear and detailed comments.
> > We reviewed your comments and compiled resolutions to each comment.
> > Our proposed remedies and explanations inserted in-line, each after your 
> > relevant comment.
> >  We shall await your follow-up instructions.
>
> Dear Avy: Please see inline for one follow-up.
> Other than the feedback below, I am perfectly happy with
> the resolution you proposed for all other issues my review
> had raised.
>
> vkg> 5/ S3.1.1.3, top of page 12:
> vkg>   s/SHALL not automatically/SHALL NOT automatically/
> avy>
> avy> There seem to be a difference in the text that you refer to and the 
> text
> avy> that is posted at
> avy> 
> http://tools.ietf.org/search/draft-c1222-transport-over-ip-00#section-3.1.1.3,
> avy> as submitted.
> avy>
> avy> 1) Section 3.1.1.3 is on page 13 not page 12
> avy> 2) The text we submitted and the text posted contain a “SHALL NOT”
> avy> and  no  “SHALL not”.  There may be some conversion error on your 
> side
> avy> or you may be looking at an earlier attempted submission.
>
> Ah, I see what the problem was...I had received -01 of your
> draft as an attachment from Gen-ART coordinator to review.
> So, while the section numbers match, the page count may
> be different between -00 (which is in the IETF archives)
> and -01 (which appears NOT to be in the IETF archives.)
>
> The "SHALL not" problem I point out above occurs in -01,
> in the fourth line of S3.1.1.3 (which happens to be on the
> top of page 12 in -01.)
>
> Hope that helps.
>
> Ciao,
>
> - vijay
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> Vijay K. Gurbani, Bell Laboratories, Alcatel-Lucent
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