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[Sipping] Re: WGLC draft-ietf-sipping-consent-format-00
Hi Mary,
thanks for your comments. Answers inline:
mary.barnes at comcast.net wrote:
Draft: draft-ietf-sipping-consent-format-00.txt
Reviewer: Mary Barnes [mary.barnes at nortel.com]
Review Date: 17 October 2006
Review Deadline: 17 October 2006
Status: WGLC
Summary: This draft is basically ready for publication, but has a
couple nits that should be fixed before publication.
Comments:
- Title: Should probably have SIP (expanded) in there somewhere.
In principle, this format is not SIP-specific. It could potentially be
used with other protocols as well. So, I do not see the need to include
SIP in the title. In any case, I have expanded the acronyms on its first
use.
- Abstract: The abstract is a bit sparse and not easily understood
without having read the document. Suggest to reword something like:
OLD:
This document defines an Extensible Markup Language (XML) format for
requesting consent. A permission document written in this format
asks a recipient for permission to perform a particular translation,
which is described in the document.
NEW:
This document defines an Extensible Markup Language (XML) format for
a permission document used to request consent. A permission document
written in this format is used by a SIP relay to request the permission,
of a specific recipient, to perform a particular SIP routing
translation.
I have used your text, but I have removed the two appearances of "SIP"
per my answer above.
I have posted a working version of the next revision of this draft at:
http://users.piuha.net/gonzalo/temp/draft-ietf-sipping-consent-format-01.txt
Thanks,
Gonzalo
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