[XCON] draft-jennings-xcon-media-control-01

[Keith Lantz <klantz at cisco.com>]

Looking pretty good. Some comments here too, though:

- First, is it the case that "conference convener" is the same as 
"conference owner" as defined in other docs? If so, then, consistent with 
some comments Mary Barnes made in a different context, might we not then 
use the same term in all docs? If not, what's the difference?

- In Section 3, the paragraph describing how the template and parameters 
are fixed and "MAY NOT be manipulated...": The second sentence begins with 
a definitive statement ("can only ..."), followed by a statement ("could 
only ...") that weakens the first statement. This needs to be cleaned up.

- Section 5.2, note about needing a better name for "parameters". Not sure 
what's really wrong with "parameter," but PLEASE don't use "instantiation 
value"! How 'bout "attribute"?

- Section 5.4, question as to whether we want to define "in" and "out" 
relative to the server: Yes! ;-)

- Section 5.5: I think it would be useful to provide some short examples at 
the outset -- e.g. "toggle buttons, pull-downs menus, radio buttons" and 
the like. As written, this discussion is too abstract, with the actual 
manifestations of these particular controls only becoming clear later in 
the document.

	It would also seem to make more sense if the subsections of 5.5 
corresponded to the list of "control types" given at the top of p. 12. No?

- Section 5.5.7: This begs for greater clarity. The example by itself is 
insufficient, IMHO.

- Section 5.5.8: Is a "list" really a control?

- Section B.1.1.4: The implied definition of controls here doesn't seem to 
jive with the definition in the body of the doc.

Regards, Keith


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