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Document: draft-ietf-roll-terminology-12.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20130323
IETF LC End Date: 20130330
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues:
 There are some missing forward definitions for some abbrevs, i.e., the first
time an abbrev is used it should be explained too (*).
(*) "too" because it is explained (i.e., put in its long form) in its entry
which can be after the first use.

Nits/editorial comments:
 - Abstract page 1: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - ToC page 2 and 5 page 7: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 1 page 2: please introduce the HVAC abbrev (the Abstract should be considered
  as to be independent)

 - 2 page 3: commisioning -> commissioning

 - 2 pages 4 and other: i.e. -> i.e., and e.g. -> e.g.,
  (including at the end of line)

 - 2 page 4: K -> k (or if you prefer Kelvin -> kilo in units :-)

 - 2 page 5 (LLN): refrigeration.. -> refrigeration. or refrigeration...

 - 2 page 5 (PER): I suggest: error- even -> error - even

 - 2 page 5 (P2MP): an example of a missing forward definition for RPL,
  i.e.: RPL -> Routing Protocol for Low-Power and Lossy Networks (RPL)

 - 2 page 6 (RPL): arbitratry -> arbitrary

Regards

Francis.Dupont at fdupont.fr

PS: a terminology with a lot of cross references can be hard to read (so to
write). I had a very bad experience with an ISO OSI one in the past so
the only thing IMHO should be required is to be readable in one pass in
the beginning to end order (vs. hopping order), so my comments about
abbrev definitions.