[Gen-art] review of draft-murchison-nntp-compress-05.txt

Francis Dupont <Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr> Mon, 26 September 2016 14:00 UTC

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Document: draft-murchison-nntp-compress-05.txt
Reviewer: Francis Dupont
Review Date: 20160922
IETF LC End Date: 20161010
IESG Telechat date: unknown

Summary: Ready

Major issues: None

Minor issues: None

Nits/editorial comments:
 - ToC page 2 and A page 21: Acknowledgements -> Acknowledgments

 - 2.2.1 page 5: e.g. -> e.g.,

 - 3 page 11: e.g, -> e.g.,

 - 7.1.1 page 15: I strongly suggest to not name the algorithm X,
  i.e., Subject: Registration of NNTP compression algorithm X -> Z

 - 7.1.2 page 16: if you can do that (or ask the RFC Editor):
  insert a line break before "(<ietf-" in place than between
  this and "nntp@...".

 - Authors' Addresses: I suggest to change US into USA. BTW if you
  prefer ISO IS 3166 2 letter codes you should change France into FR

Regards

Francis.Dupont@fdupont.fr

PS: about the not ASCII characters in Authors' Addresses, you can (should)
ask the RFC Editor for guidelines (I know things are changing about
this point but not what will be implemented before the publication
of this document...)