[RTG-DIR] Routing directorate QA review of draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs

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Hello,

I am the Routing Area Directorate member that was assigned the QA review of draft-ietf-i2rs-security-environment-reqs-01.

If you’re not familiar with the QA review process please see: https://trac.tools.ietf.org/area/rtg/trac/wiki/RtgDirDocQa

BR
Dave

General Comments:
- overall the document is organized well and has a good flow leading from overall issues to specific issues and justified requirements.

- the document presumes familiarity with the I2RS architecture and states this plainly cuing  the reader to look there first.  That said the document can be read standalone with a conceptual knowledge of the I2RS architecture.

See the attached document for marked up and inline comments.

Nits
- singular / plural usage needs to be consistent
- verb plural and tense match need attention

Note: I got through page 14.  Many comments earlier in the doc apply to the few remaining sections.

Please let me know if you have any questions.
Dave