Re: [RTG-DIR] Rtg Area Directorate QA review of draft-ietf-rtwg-uloop-delay-02.txt

"Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB)" <matthew.bocci@nokia.com> Wed, 28 September 2016 14:02 UTC

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Apologies for the multiple copies. Adding RTG Dir.

Matthew

From: "Bocci, Matthew (Nokia - GB)" <matthew.bocci@nokia.com>
Date: Wednesday, 28 September 2016 at 11:22
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Subject: Rtg Area Directorate QA review of draft-ietf-rtwg-uloop-delay-02.txt

Authors,

I have been asked to do a Routing Area Directorate QA review of draft-ietf-rtwg-uloop-delay-02.txt



Summary:

The rationale for this document is clear and the mechanism seems reasonably straight forward. However, one major comment that I have is that the English grammar is poor in some sections, and it is missing normal English articles in some places (a, an, the,…), making it hard to read. I would suggest that the authors go through the draft with a native English speaker to help resolve these nits.


Comments:

Minor Issues:

Section 2.1 Fast reroute unefficiency
s/unefficiency/inefficiency

Section 4.1 Definitions, 2nd bullet:
…by incrementing the timer vape when the IGP is instable.
s/instable/unstable

4.3 Local Events
The draft states that it assumes that only a single link failure has been seen by the IGP area. However, its not clear how you distinguish a single local failure from consecutive (non-simultaneous) failure that occurs within a given short timespan e.g. during the initial re-convergence period. It would help to clarify this.

Regards

Matthew